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Band 7

You have heard that a developer plans to build a shopping centre in your city. Write a letter to the city council, In your letter Explain how you heard about the plan. Describe why you do not think it's a good idea. Suggest some alternative solutions

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am reaching out to express my concerns regarding the proposed development of the shopping centre in our city. I recently got to know about
this
 project during our monthly Housing Society meeting. All the members were very excited about
this
 new venture and we all reviewed the plans and
location
 . I understand the motive behind
this
 development
to
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 boost local commerce and provide a variety of shopping options,but I believe that it is not in the best interest of our community for several reasons.
Firstly
, the suggested
location
 is in the heart of a residential area, which would undoubtedly increase the traffic congestion
as well as
 noise pollution adversely impacting the quality of life.
Furthermore
, our city already has several shopping centres struggling to attract customers and are on the verge of shutting down, building a new
location
 will only dilute their present customer base and create more problems for local businesses.
Lastly
,
according to
 my perspective,
instead
 of building a new shopping mall our town can benefit enormously from a recreation centre for all age groups .
This
 can allow people to focus on their fitness and provide convenient facilities for many other sports .
Moreover
, in context with the
location
, If we can amend that by choosing a less busy area can attract more people to the facility and can be a good source of income for the City Council. I hope that you will consider my suggestions ! Yours Faithfully, Pranav Dhawan.
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task achievement
Consider mentioning specific details about the existing shopping centres to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear transition between your concerns and suggestions for alternative solutions.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and polite, establishing a respectful tone.
task achievement
The response effectively addresses all parts of the task with relevant reasons and suggestions.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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