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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in the history of the house or the building they live in what are the reason for this? how can they research this?

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In some countries, the number of
people
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 who are interested in the history of the apartment or the building they are going to buy is increasing.
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 because they are probably concerned about their
health
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 as some places can have
a damaging long-term effects
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damaging long-term effects
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 on our
health
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. To commence with,
People
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’s
health
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 awareness has increased over the years and that
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 influenced their process of choosing a home for their families. The reason for
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 the stories that are published in the newspapers about the diseases that
people
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 can catch if they are living in an unclean space even without
hem
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them
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 knowing it.
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,
mold
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 can affect the respiratory system of
people
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 if they are exposed to it for a long time
especially
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 children.
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, there are many simple ways to check a place before you buy it.
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,you can ask the broker in the neighbourhood if they know any information about the building. Not only you can ask the
neighbors
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 but
also
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 you can ask the previous owner about the reasons why they moved out.
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 to that, you can get the apartment checked by a professional for
mold
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 or termites.
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, in the past 10
years
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 the number of owners who check their apartments by a professional company for
health
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 reasons has increased in Egypt. In conclusion, the more
people
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 are concerned about their
health
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, the more they will care about the environment they live in especially their
home
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homes
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.
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 because of the rumors that they hear in the printed media so precautions are needed to be safe.
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, it is quite simple to search the history of a building by a brief conversation with a neighbour or even by a professional.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • archival records
  • historical significance
  • preservation
  • restoration
  • cultural heritage
  • ancestry
  • architectural features
  • heritage conservation
  • property deeds
  • local history books
  • genealogy
  • census records
  • historical societies
  • land registry
  • oral histories
  • blueprints
  • renovation
  • tax incentives
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