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Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts illustrate the daily proportions behind the lowest and the highest temperatures recorded in
Brisbane
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 and
Canberra
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,
in addition
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 to the
overall
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 median of rainfall
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among
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 the year.
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, Both cities witnessed the hottest
degrees
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 in February
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 and the lowest in June and July.
Brisbane
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 and
Canberra
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 experienced a fluctuation in the amount of rainy
days
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 throughout the month. The line graph shows that the maximum
degrees
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 witnessed in both cities have fluctuated from 27
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 in January, experiencing a gradual downward figure starting in March, followed by another rising figure, which reached
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approximately 30
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 in December.
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, the minimum temperatures that were
initially
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 scored in
Brisbane
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 and
Canberra
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 were almost 21 and 13 respectively, followed by a gradual and symmetrical decrease until August, in which the graph spiked again with a significant upward increase by the end of the year. The bar graph reports that the longest rainfall duration in
Brisbane
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 was recorded in February and March at a total of 14
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 of continuous rain;
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,
Canberra
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 scored a maximum of 10
days
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 of rain in June, July, August and October. The shortest period of rain was less than 8
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 in each city, with different distributions around the year.
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Introduction
Ensure that the introduction adequately paraphrases the task and presents a clear overview. Avoid generic introductions and focus on summarizing the key features of the data.
Logical Structure
Work on presenting a clear logical structure. Organize the information in a way that guides the reader through the points with clear connections and transitions.
Supported Main Points
While main points are identified, make sure to develop and elaborate on them more effectively by using supporting details. This could include specific data from the chart or graph or additional commentary on the trends.
Complete Response
Address all parts of the task, making sure to highlight and summarize the main trends or features. This should include making relevant comparisons and contrasts between data points.
Clear Comprehensive Ideas
Focus on providing clearer and more comprehensive explanations of the information presented. The ideas should be fully developed with appropriate detail.
Relevant Specific Examples
Use relevant and specific examples from the data to support your descriptions and comparisons. This helps to provide evidence for the points you are making and make your writing more persuasive.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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