The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the amount of individuals
Correct pronoun usage
who participate
participate
in four different Wrong verb form
participated
type
of sportsChange to a plural noun
types
a
specific area between two years (1985 and 2005).
Change preposition
in a
Overall
, we can seen
thatChange the verb form
see
,
the number of people who Remove the comma
apply
play
Wrong verb form
played
rugby
in given
first year Correct article usage
a given
had
Verb problem
was
highest
amount Correct article usage
the highest
wheras
the badminton players was Correct your spelling
whereas
lowest
and it Correct article usage
the lowest
kept stay
place Wrong verb form
stayed
in during
20 years. Change preposition
for
Additionally
, in given last
year the proportion of tennis
player
had Fix the agreement mistake
players
highest
number.
Change the article
the highest
To begin
with, in 1985, the male or female
who Fix the agreement mistake
females
attend
Wrong verb form
attended
the
Correct article usage
apply
rugby
sport shown
that the biggest rate Wrong verb form
showed
it
was approximately 240 and Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
tennis
followed the
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apply
rugby
and it was 150. The people
who love Correct quantifier usage
number of people
the
basketball or badminton Correct article usage
apply
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
a
few Correct article usage
apply
amount
and it was almost 75 and 52 relatively. Change to a plural noun
amounts
Furthermore
Add a comma
Furthermore,
the
enrollment Correct article usage
apply
of
basketball and badminton Change preposition
in
had
stayed Unnecessary verb
apply
same
Correct article usage
the same
in
until 2005. Change preposition
apply
Tennis
participation had
increased constantly. In 1995 the rate of Wrong verb form
has
tennis
and rugby
attenders
had Correct your spelling
attendees
same
Change the article
the same
quentity
it was 200. After 1995, the portion of Correct your spelling
quantity
rugby
subscribers had
decreased sharply.Unnecessary verb
apply
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rugby, tennis with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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