The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the amount of individuals
Correct pronoun usage
who participate
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participate
Wrong verb form
participated
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in four different
type
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types
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of sports
a
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in a
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specific area between two years (1985 and 2005).
Overall
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, we can
seen
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see
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that
,
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apply
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the number of people who
play
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played
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rugby
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in
given
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a given
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first year
had
Verb problem
was
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highest
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the highest
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amount
wheras
Correct your spelling
whereas
the badminton players was
lowest
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the lowest
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and it
kept stay
Wrong verb form
stayed
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place
in during
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for
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20 years.
Additionally
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, in given
last
Linking Words
year the proportion of
tennis
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player
Fix the agreement mistake
players
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had
highest
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the highest
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number.
To begin
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with, in 1985, the male or
female
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females
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who
attend
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attended
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the
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apply
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rugby
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sport
shown
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showed
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that the biggest rate
it
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apply
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was approximately 240 and
the
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apply
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tennis
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followed
the
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apply
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rugby
Use synonyms
and it was 150. The
people
Correct quantifier usage
number of people
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who love
the
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apply
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basketball or badminton
was
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were
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a
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apply
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few
amount
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amounts
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and it was almost 75 and 52 relatively.
Linking Words
Furthermore
Add a comma
Furthermore,
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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enrollment
of
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in
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basketball and badminton
had
Unnecessary verb
apply
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stayed
same
Correct article usage
the same
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in
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apply
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until 2005.
Tennis
Use synonyms
participation
had
Wrong verb form
has
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increased constantly. In 1995 the rate of
tennis
Use synonyms
and
rugby
Use synonyms
attenders
Correct your spelling
attendees
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had
same
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the same
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quentity
Correct your spelling
quantity
it was 200. After 1995, the portion of
rugby
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subscribers
had
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apply
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decreased sharply.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rugby, tennis with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • participation rate
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • stable
  • comparative analysis
  • dominance
  • decline
  • steady growth
  • significant change
  • regional popularity
  • time period
  • sports activities
  • data representation
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