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People are using bicycles despite the development of other modes of transportation.what are the advantages and disadvantages of a bicycle.

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Technology
is
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has
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 flourished by leaps and bounds in each and every sector, especially
transportation
. Even though there are some advanced modes of
transportation
 available, people are
ridden
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riding
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 bicycles.
This
 trend has some
benefits
 to the rider
such
 as
healthy
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health
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 and environmental
benefits
although
 there are some drawbacks like limited
distance
 can only ride and lack of
bicycle
lanes
 and
trails
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages for the following reasons.
To begin
 with, there are some
benefits
 of using
bicycle
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a bicycle
the bicycle
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, one of the main advantages is that the rider can lead a healthy lifestyle which
this
 type of
vehicles
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vehicle
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 can reduce
the
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fats and calories.
This
 is because riding bike is a healthy, fun and
a
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low-impact
from
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the
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exercise
to
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for
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 all age groups.
For example
, cycling can help to reduce
the
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serious illness
such
 as stroke, heart attack, some cancer, arthritis, obesity, anxiety and depression. Another merit is that many environmental
benefits
for
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to
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 riding
bike
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a bike
the bike
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 as compared to any other motor
vehicles
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vehicle
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.
This
 is because cycles do not release any greenhouse gases
unlike
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, unlike
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 buses and cars.
Similarly
,
this
 mode of
transportation
reduce
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reduces
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 the carbon footprint.
However
, there are some drawbacks
of
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to
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 riding bicycles. One of the main demerits is that riders can only travel
to
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apply
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the
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limited
distance
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distances
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 and it cannot help
for
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the
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long
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long-distance
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distance
 travel as compared to the other modes of
transportation
.
Likewise
, it cannot carry other passengers like buses and cars.
For instance
, cars can carry three or four members
along with
 things simultaneously from one place to
other
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another
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 places but
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the cycle
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cycle
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cycles
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 cannot do
like
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apply
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this
. Another demerit is
that
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the
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 lack of cycle
lanes
 and
trails
 in cities and towns.
This
 is because more and more people drive motor vehicles
instead
 of
bicycle
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bicycles
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,
therefore
 the local authority has not built more cycle
lanes
 and
trails
 it depends on the majority of the individuals
what
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who
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use
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use them
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.
To conclude
, having a healthy lifestyle in order to avoid
the
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serious diseases,
reducing
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and reducing
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the
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greenhouse gas and carbon
foot print
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footprint
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 are the
benefits
 of using
bicycle
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a bicycle
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.
Although
, riding limited
distance
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distances
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 and
cannot
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not
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carry
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carrying
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 people and things,
lack
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the lack
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 of
bicycle
lanes
 and
trails
 are the drawbacks of
this
 tendency.
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