the graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart provided depicts the
number
of visitors
(millions
) in four different international museums from 1980 to 2015. By and large, Louvre
had the highest Correct article usage
the Louvre
number
of visitors
throughout the period
, while
Shenzhen Museums got the lowest in the beginning. Interestingly, London
Science Correct article usage
the London
Museum
experienced a downward trend.
To commence with, Louvre
Correct article usage
the Louvre
took
the highest Verb problem
had
number
of visitors
all over the period
. In 1980, around 7.8 millions
people went Change to singular
million
to
there and Remove the preposition
apply
it
increased Correct pronoun usage
this
until
approximately 9.5 Change preposition
to
millions
in 2015. Meanwhile, Shenzhen got the lowest with only under 4 Change to singular
million
millions
Change to singular
million
visitors
at the start,
and finished with Remove the comma
apply
the
similar Correct article usage
a
number
.
Moreover
, Vatican
Correct article usage
the Vatican
Museum
was in the
second place throughout the Correct article usage
apply
period
. It dramatically increased from around 5 millions
Change to singular
million
visitors
to 9.5 millions
. Change to singular
million
In addition
, London
Science Correct article usage
the London
Museum
was in the
third place at the beginning of the Correct article usage
apply
period
. The number
of tourists visiting this
museum
declined year by year. It ended with the lowest number
of visitors
(2.25 millions
) in 2015.Change to singular
million
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, millions, period, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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