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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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In the modern world, some
people
 want to create their
job
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jobs
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 so self-employment has a variety of
effect
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 on society that could have both negative and positive sides. I reckon that a crucial number of
people
 possess their own companies, so they are self-employers
whereas
 other
people
 claim that working for a company is better than being a boss.
This
 essay will discuss the pros and cons of self-employment.
To begin
 with, the most significant benefit is that being self-employed is,
people
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 can organize their schedules and working styles.
For instance
, they have the option to sleep in and avoid rush-hour commutes.
Therefore
, they can make independent decisions without any discussion with someone who is from a higher priority group.
On the other hand
, there are some cons to these self-employed decisions.
In other words
, seeing that if a person begins and manages her own business, she
wil
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will
 definitely need some help in future
due to
 the fact that creating a self-business is a challenging thing.
According to
 an article that I read, some experts assume that two million
people
 will lose their jobs in the world
due to
 their irresponsible job discipline. In conclusion, I will agree that working for a company or an organization is more comfortable than having your own business
additionally
 it has a
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non- damaging
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 effect on society but
also
 that the unemployment rate among
self employers
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self-employers
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 will absolutely increase
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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