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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damages does plastic do to the environment? what can be done by the government and individuals to solve this problem?

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damages #government #individuals
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In the modern era, The
environment
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 is going
to
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badly. Because Nowadays,
plastic
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using
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 is increasing.
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 one of the
reason
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reasons
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 for changing the
environment
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in
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badly. These
are effected
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affect
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 every
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people
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person
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,
animals
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animal
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,
everything
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and everything
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. The following paragraph will discuss
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this
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 statement.
One
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people
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 like easy and quick their work finish. But they do not think after doing
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, what
are
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 the
effect
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 our society. Every
humans
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human
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are think
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thinks
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 and
do
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 selfish.so, they do not think
other
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about other
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people
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’s
life
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lives
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, and our
childrent’s
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children’s
life
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lives
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.
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, our future. These days, more and more available
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, and
compare
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 to
other
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others
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,
this
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 is less price, so
people
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 bring and
using
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.
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,
somedays
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some days
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, I am seeing, create
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 bottles,
bags
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and bags
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, and
also
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 ,most of thinks
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the
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plastic
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. Poor
people
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, do not think
quality
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of quality
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. Only think price.
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,
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the
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plastic
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using
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use
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 our society is changing badly. Pollution is increasing our
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 animals are suffering from
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.
plastic
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is
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can not
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use
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be used
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 again and again.so
that is
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main
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the main
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 problem for
using
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use
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.
This
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is give
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effect
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affects
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 air, water, and every
facilities
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facility
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 in
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environment
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the environment
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,
as well
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as
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and
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 we can not get good water and air. So can not
living
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live
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 long time humans and animals.
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 very bad in future.
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,
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the Government
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 should
activity
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actively
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using
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use
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the
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apply
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plastic
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people
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 and
do
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not accept that product. and will increase
vat
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VAT
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to
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on
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plastic
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-related
products
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. That will help decrease
the
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plastic
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using
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use
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. In conclusion,
every
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people
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 will think what are the
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effect
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effects
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 of
use
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plastic
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, our future how
to
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it to
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effect
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affect
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,
so
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and how
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 that
can
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will
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 help
they
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them
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will decide
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to
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 stop
the
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plastic
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using
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use
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.
And
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People
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people
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 should
will
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be
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interest
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interested
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use
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the
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reusable
products
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.
it
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It
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 will increase
competitive
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competition
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 produce produce.
Then
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people
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 can buy and
use
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 other reusable
products
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.it is best idea
for
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to
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 reduce the
plastic
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products
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task response
The response must address the prompt fully with a clear position, and should stay on topic throughout. Develop your ideas and provide clear examples or explanations for your points.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas clearly by separating them into distinct paragraphs. Include an introduction and conclusion to frame your essay. Use linking words to connect your ideas and ensure that your essay flows logically from one point to the next.
language
Check your grammar, syntax, and vocabulary usage to enhance readability. Aim for a range of sentence structures and a sophisticated level of vocabulary, with attention to accuracy and appropriateness.
task response
Avoid making overly general statements without supporting them with specific examples or explanations. Expand on your main points with relevant details and evidence.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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