Your best friend is moving back to your city after being overseas for five years. Write a letter to convince your friend to move in with you. In the letter: - Explain how much you have missed your friend - Describe how you feel about your friend’s return - Give reasons that you and your friend should share a home

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Dear Ramesh,                        Hope you are doing well, I am feeling extremely excited to know that you are returning back to our city
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I am writing
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mail to suggest you
to
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apply
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stay with me once you are in
city
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the city
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.I think, it it really a long time ago we had seen each other. I still remember our college
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when we used to stay in
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flat and travel to college on the same bike.
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, During our term
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we used to travel and visit multiple cities. I really missed all those days and fun. Sometimes, I feel extremely emotional
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recalling all those days. But, I am very happy to know you returning back and planning to settle here.It will be an Icing on the cake
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if we unite again and plan to stay in the same city.
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, I would like to recommend you stay with me in my apartment.
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to tell you,
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I'm
staying alone at my place and you will
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enough space to keep yourself comfortable. we can have all the fun which we used to have during our college days.
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, we can have numerous
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activities during our weekend.I will be On my toes to hear from you.Best
regardsRajiv
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regards Rajiv
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear main idea and that the ideas are logically sequenced. The letter could benefit from more structured paragraphs separating the expression of emotions, details of the friend's return, and reasons to stay together. Use clear topic sentences to improve coherence.
coherence cohesion
The letter should start with a more personal and engaging greeting, such as "Dear [Friend's Name]," instead of a generic opening. Additionally, the closing lacks a warm sign-off that could strengthen the personal tone of a letter to a friend. Consider using phrases like "Warm regards" or "Eagerly awaiting your reply".
task achievement
Fully address all three bullet points in the task. While the letter touches on each, it could delve deeper into how much the writer has missed the friend, the excitement of the friend's return, and more compelling reasons for sharing a home. Expanding on these points with specific examples or experiences would enhance the task achievement.
task achievement
The letter sometimes veers into a formal tone inappropriate for writing to a close friend. Slang, idiomatic expressions, and a more conversational tone would be more suitable in this context. It's important to maintain the friendly and informal tone throughout the letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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