The graph below gives information about computer possession by households in one European country between 1997 and 2011
The line graph given illustrates how many
computers
a family had in 4 categories, based on the data collected in a European nation during the period of seven years (1997-2011). From an overall
perspective, the most striking feature is that there is an upward trend of two-computer possession in every home, while
the opposite is true for no computers
. While
one computer ownership held the lion’s share, three or more computers
accounted for the minuscule share. It is also
evident that there was a remarkable discrepancy between these kinds of surveyed possessions.
Regarding the information pertaining to all four types of ownership, the figure of no computer was devoted at the top-tier place, with a shy of 45% at the starting point, before witnessing a gradual leap to a shade of one-fifth. Besides
, the statistics for the two computers
saw an increase of 15% from 9% over the whole period. Interestingly, the number of only one computer remained steadily around 45 percent
in seven years. The data for three or more Change the spelling
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computers
increased gradually from nearly nothing to 7.5 percent
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