Some people believe that violence in the media, such as in television programs and films, directly results in violent behavior. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some
peope
believe that the demonstration of action, gore and fighting scenes in visual media is Correct your spelling
people
negatively
our children and adults as it makes them Change the word
negative
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to Correct your spelling
vulnerable
develop
aggressive traits. Wrong verb form
developing
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essay completely agree
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agrees
this
viewpoint because an
increased exposure to Remove the article
apply
such
media have
negative consequences on our youth and Correct subject-verb agreement
has
also
it also
motivate
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motivates
people
to engage in criminal activities who have propensity
towards crime.
The main reason why I believe that it has deleterious effects on our youngsters lies in the fact that they consider many artists acting in Add an article
a propensity
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apply
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shows or movies as their role Fix the agreement mistake
models
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and try to follow them in real life. It is a well-known fact that celebrities are considered Fix the agreement mistake
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for
a vast majority of Change preposition
by
people
due to
their popularity, and an
attention they receive from their fans. Correct article usage
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Given the
fact that children, Change preposition
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for example
, often struggle to distinguish between rights and wrongs, owing to their average intelligence, makes them vulnerable to foster
aggressive behavioural tendencies when they watch their Wrong verb form
fostering
favorite
actors involved in the same behaviour on-screen. Change the spelling
favourite
For example
, not all, but majority
of minor culprits engaged in fatal shooting incidents across the USA had confessed that they embarked on their criminal pursuits after getting inspired Correct article usage
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by
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favourite
TV
character.
Another factor why violent TV
serials and movies could lead to aggression is because they have the ability to pursuade
criminal-minded Correct your spelling
persuade
people
to resort to crimes. This
is highly controversial but I strongly believe that there is enough evidence that some people
find pleasure while
watching the suffering od
others. Correct your spelling
of
For example
, In my country, there was a 14 year old
kid who testified to police in an Add a hyphen
14-year-old
interogation
that he was Correct your spelling
interrogation
invloved
in Correct your spelling
involved
commiting
five murders of toddlers because he found Correct your spelling
committing
a
great pleasure Correct article usage
apply
while
watching them struggling for their Change preposition
in
life
. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
Therefore
, I would argue that If successful athletes, such
as Ronaldo, could inspire people
to take up sports, I anticipate that, likewise
, violent contents
on Fix the agreement mistake
content
TV
can motivate people
having criminal mindset
to embark on their journey Fix the agreement mistake
mindsets
of
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to
criminal
world.
In conclusion, I will stand by my stance that violent and unlawful visual stories on Add an article
the criminal
TV
is
affecting our Change the verb form
are
people
negatively. This
is because it has repercussions on the vulnerable minds of our young people
and it can also
convince some criminal-psychic individuals to indulge in illicit activites
.Correct your spelling
activities
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