An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What are the reasons behind this trend? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own

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increased more tremendously than ever before
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globalisation.
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, many
professionals
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such
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as doctors and teachers are moved to developed
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from their poorer countries for employment. Better
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and hike earnings are the reasons behind
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trend and some
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can be overcome
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tendency.
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behind to increasing number of
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are
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left in their
home
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country
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to other
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. One of the major reasons is that developed
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provides
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more
salary
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to the
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as compared to their
home
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nations
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. Not only they
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hike
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earnings
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in earnings
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but
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they
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all compensations, incentives and vocational leaves in order to they can be financially stable. Another cause is that developed countries are provided
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the
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better
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as compared to poorer lands; many
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nations
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provide jobs with permanent residency for
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,
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hence
,
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and they
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they
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can lead to
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a better
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like PR and citizenship.
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,
in
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Australia provides many job opportunities to
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professionals
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from
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underdeveloped
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nations
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with PR.
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professionals
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like to move there rapidly. There are some
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can
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be
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overcome
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situation. One of the major remedies is that
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underdeveloped
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should provide more
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with
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all
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compensations for
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like developed
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, and
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, moving to other
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might
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by
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this
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. Another solution is that the
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should
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a new rules
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against
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professionals
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migration
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to other
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nations
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to serve
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other
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another country
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country
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.
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,
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were studied
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by their own
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countries' people tax, so they should serve their
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country
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after
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their course
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of migartion
toother
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other
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and
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other
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another country
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country
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. These are the main
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to overcome
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tendency.
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, innumerable
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are moving to other
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from their
home
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country
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due
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to
getting
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better
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a better
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lifestyle
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and
more
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higher
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salary
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salaries
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. The
authority
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authorities
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should give a reasonable
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to
professionals
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like
developed
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in developed
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nations
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and the government should
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a
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strict
law
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against the
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who
not
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do not
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serve
for
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their
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country
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, these are the
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situaion
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situation
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