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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What are the reasons behind this trend? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own

These days, the
professionals
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' migration has
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increased more tremendously than ever before
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globalisation.
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, many
professionals
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such
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 as doctors and teachers are moved to developed
nations
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 from their poorer countries for employment. Better
lifestyle
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 and hike earnings are the reasons behind
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 trend and some
solutions
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 can be overcome
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 tendency.
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cause
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 behind to increasing number of
professionals
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are
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left in their
home
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country
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 to other
nations
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. One of the major reasons is that developed
nations
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provides
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 more
salary
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 to the
professionals
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 as compared to their
home
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nations
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. Not only they
provides
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hike
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earnings
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in earnings
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 but
also
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gives
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 all compensations, incentives and vocational leaves in order to they can be financially stable. Another cause is that developed countries are provided
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the
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a
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 better
lifestyle
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 as compared to poorer lands; many
western
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nations
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 provide jobs with permanent residency for
professionals
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,
hemce
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hence
,
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and they
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they
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 can lead to
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 a better
lifestyle
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 like PR and citizenship.
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,
in
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Australia provides many job opportunities to
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professionals
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 from
under developed
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underdeveloped
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nations
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 with PR.
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professionals
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 like to move there rapidly. There are some
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can
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that can
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be
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overcome
this
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 situation. One of the major remedies is that
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underdeveloped
nations
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 should provide more
salary
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with
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all
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compensations for
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 like developed
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, and
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, moving to other
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 might
be diminished
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by
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this
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. Another solution is that the
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 should
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a new rules
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new rules
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 against
the
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professionals
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migration
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migrating
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 to other
nation
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nations
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 to serve
for
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other
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another country
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country
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.
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,
professionals
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 were studied
byown
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by their own
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 countries' people tax, so they should serve their
home
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country
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 after
finished
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 their course
instead
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 of migartion
toother
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other
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 and
serve for
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other
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another country
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country
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. These are the main
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 to overcome
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 tendency.
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, innumerable
professionals
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 are moving to other
nations
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 from their
home
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country
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due
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to
getting
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better
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a better
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lifestyle
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 and
more
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higher
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salary
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salaries
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. The
authority
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authorities
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 should give a reasonable
salary
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 to
professionals
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 like
developed
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in developed
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nations
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 and the government should
be implemented
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a
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strict
law
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laws
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 against the
professionals
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 who
not
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do not
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 serve
for
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their
home
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country
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, these are the
solutions
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of
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situaion
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situation
.

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coherence cohesion
Your essay appears to have a basic structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which is good. However, the logical flow between ideas could be improved. It's important to ensure that each paragraph flows smoothly into the next. Use a wider range of cohesive devices and transitions to improve readability and the logical progression of ideas.
task achievement
Regarding task achievement, you have attempted to answer the prompt by discussing reasons and solutions for the migration of professionals from poorer countries to developed countries. However, your ideas would benefit from further development and clarification. Your recommendations are somewhat generic and would carry more weight with specific, detailed examples and a more thorough analysis of the implications. Aim to fully expand on your points to demonstrate a comprehensive understanding of the topic.
Your opinion

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