An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What are the reasons behind this trend? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own

These days, the
professionals
' migration has
been
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increased more tremendously than ever before
due to
the
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globalisation.
As a result
, many
professionals
such
as doctors and teachers are moved to developed
nations
from their poorer countries for employment. Better
lifestyle
and hike earnings are the reasons behind
this
trend and some
solutions
can be overcome
this
tendency.
This
essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. There are some
cause
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behind to increasing number of
professionals
are
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left in their
home
country
to other
nations
. One of the major reasons is that developed
nations
provides
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more
salary
to the
professionals
as compared to their
home
nations
. Not only they
provides
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hike
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earnings
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but
also
they
gives
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all compensations, incentives and vocational leaves in order to they can be financially stable. Another cause is that developed countries are provided
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the
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better
lifestyle
as compared to poorer lands; many
western
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nations
provide jobs with permanent residency for
professionals
,
hemce
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hence
,
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and they
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they
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can lead to
get
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a better
lifestyle
like PR and citizenship.
For example
,
in
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Australia provides many job opportunities to
the
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professionals
from
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nations
with PR.
Then
professionals
like to move there rapidly. There are some
solutions
can
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be
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overcome
this
situation. One of the major remedies is that
the
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underdeveloped
nations
should provide more
salary
with
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all
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compensations for
professionals
like developed
nations
, and
as a result
, moving to other
nations
might
be diminished
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by
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this
. Another solution is that the
authority
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should
be implemented
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a new rules
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against
the
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professionals
migration
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to other
nation
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nations
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to serve
for
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other
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another country
other countries
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country
.
For instance
,
professionals
were studied
byown
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countries' people tax, so they should serve their
home
country
after
finished
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their course
instead
of migartion
toother
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other
nations
and
serve for
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other
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another country
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country
. These are the main
solutions
to overcome
this
tendency.
To conclude
, innumerable
professionals
are moving to other
nations
from their
home
country
due
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to
getting
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get
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better
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a better
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lifestyle
and
more
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higher
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salary
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salaries
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. The
authority
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authorities
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should give a reasonable
salary
to
professionals
like
developed
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in developed
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nations
and the government should
be implemented
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implement
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a
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strict
law
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against the
professionals
who
not
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do not
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serve
for
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their
home
country
, these are the
solutions
of
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this
situaion
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situation
.
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