An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What are the reasons behind this trend? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own
These days, the
professionals
' migration has Use synonyms
been
increased more tremendously than ever before Unnecessary verb
apply
due to
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the
globalisation. Correct article usage
apply
As a result
, many Linking Words
professionals
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such
as doctors and teachers are moved to developed Linking Words
nations
from their poorer countries for employment. Better Use synonyms
lifestyle
and hike earnings are the reasons behind Use synonyms
this
trend and some Linking Words
solutions
can be overcome Use synonyms
this
tendency. Linking Words
This
essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons.
There are some Linking Words
cause
behind to increasing number of Fix the agreement mistake
causes
professionals
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are
left in their Unnecessary verb
apply
home
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country
to other Use synonyms
nations
. One of the major reasons is that developed Use synonyms
nations
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provides
more Change the verb form
provide
salary
to the Use synonyms
professionals
as compared to their Use synonyms
home
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nations
. Not only they Use synonyms
provides
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provide
hike
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a hike
earnings
but Change preposition
in earnings
also
they Linking Words
gives
all compensations, incentives and vocational leaves in order to they can be financially stable. Another cause is that developed countries are provided Change the verb form
give
Add the preposition
with the
the
better Correct article usage
a
lifestyle
as compared to poorer lands; many Use synonyms
western
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Western
nations
provide jobs with permanent residency for Use synonyms
professionals
, Use synonyms
hemce
, Correct your spelling
hence
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and they
they
can lead to Correct pronoun usage
which
get
a better Change the verb form
getting
lifestyle
like PR and citizenship. Use synonyms
For example
, Linking Words
in
Australia provides many job opportunities to Change preposition
apply
the
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apply
professionals
from Use synonyms
under developed
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underdeveloped
nations
with PR. Use synonyms
Then
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professionals
like to move there rapidly.
There are some Use synonyms
solutions
Use synonyms
can
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that can
be
overcome Unnecessary verb
apply
this
situation. One of the major remedies is that Linking Words
the
underdeveloped Correct article usage
apply
nations
should provide more Use synonyms
salary
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with
Change preposition
apply
all
compensations for Correct determiner usage
apply
professionals
like developed Use synonyms
nations
, and Use synonyms
as a result
, moving to other Linking Words
nations
might Use synonyms
be diminished
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diminish
by
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apply
this
. Another solution is that the Linking Words
authority
should Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
be implemented
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implement
a new rules
against Correct the article-noun agreement
new rules
a new rule
the
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apply
professionals
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migration
to other Replace the word
migrating
nation
to serve Fix the agreement mistake
nations
for
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apply
other
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another country
other countries
country
. Use synonyms
For instance
, Linking Words
professionals
were studied Use synonyms
byown
countries' people tax, so they should serve their Correct word choice
by their own
home
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country
after Use synonyms
finished
their course Change the form of the verb
finishing
instead
of migartion Linking Words
toother
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other
nations
and Use synonyms
serve for
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serving
other
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another country
other countries
country
. These are the main Use synonyms
solutions
to overcome Use synonyms
this
tendency.
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To conclude
, innumerable Linking Words
professionals
are moving to other Use synonyms
nations
from their Use synonyms
home
Use synonyms
country
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due
to Change preposition
apply
getting
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get
better
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a better
lifestyle
and Use synonyms
more
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higher
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salary
. The Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
authority
should give a reasonable Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
salary
to Use synonyms
professionals
like Use synonyms
developed
Change preposition
in developed
nations
and the government should Use synonyms
be implemented
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implement
a
strict Correct article usage
apply
law
against the Fix the agreement mistake
laws
professionals
who Use synonyms
not
serve Add a missing verb
do not
for
their Change preposition
apply
home
Use synonyms
country
, these are the Use synonyms
solutions
Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
to
this
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situaion
.Correct your spelling
situation
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