The line graph shows the average number of weekly patieents vivsiting four clinics of a hospital form 2010 to 2016.
The given line chart illustrates how much of
patients
visit
per week in four different clinics; which are Wrong verb form
visited
brith
control, eye, Correct your spelling
birth
diabetric
and dental, of a hospital between 2010 and 2016. The units are Correct your spelling
diabetic
measure
in Wrong verb form
measured
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
patients
per year.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that all the clinic
experienced a gradual growth Fix the agreement mistake
clinics
for
Change preposition
in
patients appointment
, except for Fix the agreement mistake
patient appointments
birth
control Correct article usage
the birth
clinic
.
In terms of eye clinic
, Fix the agreement mistake
clinics
initialy
at approximately 125 Correct your spelling
initially
patients
in 2010 and then
slightly grow
until 2012 before soaring between 2012 and 2016, and Wrong verb form
grew
reach
a peak at 250 Wrong verb form
reaching
in
the end of the period. Change the preposition
at
Moreover
, Diaberic
Correct your spelling
Diabetic
clinic
patients
also
increased, stood
at just above 50 in 2010 and moderately Wrong verb form
standing
rose
to about 90 in 2012, Wrong verb form
rising
whereas
on
Change preposition
during
this
period the figure remain
stable until 2014. After that, between 2014 and 2016 the Wrong verb form
remained
patients visit
started to Fix the agreement mistake
number of patient visits
went
up and Change the verb
go
reach
around 180 Wrong verb form
reached
patients
.
Regarding the other two clinics left, the Birth control clinic
patients
Change noun form
patients'
patient's
appointment
show a Fix the agreement mistake
appointments
fluctuated
trend, Replace the word
fluctuating
begin
at just under 250 and the biggest number compared Wrong verb form
beginning
Change preposition
to another
another clinics
. In the following year, the figure Replace the adjective
another clinic
other clinics
encountred
a small Correct your spelling
encountered
climbed
at nearly 280 before hitting Replace the word
climb
the a
trough at just below 200. Choose an article
the
a
Moreover
the number Add a comma
Moreover,
back to
rose again from 2014 to 2016 and Rephrase
apply
reach
precisely Wrong verb form
reached
at
250. Change preposition
apply
Lastly
, the Dental clinic
also
witnessed a similar trend, in 2010 started at exactly 100 patients
then
dropped modestly in 2012 at almost a
half and started to Correct article usage
apply
rose
again until reached 140 Wrong verb form
rise
at
2016.Change preposition
in
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, moreover".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words patients, clinic with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
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