You recently bought a jacket, but when you got home, you discovered it was damaged. When you took it back to the store, you were told that merchandise cannot be returned.

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Dear Sir/
Maddam
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Madam
, I hope you 're well I am
writting
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writing
to you about
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an unsastisfy
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unsastisfy
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satisfy
that I bought from your
store
in
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last
week. I had an excellent shopping at your
store
and I decided to
bought
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a
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an
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ABC
jacket
. I checked and
pleased
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was pleased
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about it. But when I came
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home, I again tried it and I discovered a tear inside it. I immediately contacted to
Store
's
mechandiser
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merchandiser
merchandise
but she could not resolve
this
issue. She explained to me
,
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because
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that because
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I clearly inspected
this
jacket
at the
Store
so
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apply
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that
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the
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tear
was
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did
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not
belonged
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belong
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to
store
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the store
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. I
ensure
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ensured
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that
problem
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the problem
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was
happended
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happened
by
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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factory. I
also
send
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tearing pictures in
attched
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attached
files. You may check and evaluate it. I would like your
store
replace
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new
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my new
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jacket
for me. I really like
jacket
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the jacket
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brand and want to own one for
this
winter. I hope you
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know
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this
situation
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feed
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get
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back to me as soon. Thanks for your consideration. Best regards, Bui Thanh Tung
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structure
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coherence
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task achievement
Address all parts of the task. Make sure you state the problem, explain the situation in sufficient detail, and propose a clear solution.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • merchandise
  • damaged
  • disappointment
  • anticipation
  • wear and tear
  • return policy
  • customer service
  • frustration
  • defective
  • dispute
  • resolution
  • trust
  • loyalty
  • compensation
  • refund
  • exchange
  • warranty
  • product quality
  • consumer rights
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