The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years 2000, 2005 and 2010. The results show the reasons people gave for not going to work.

The chart below illustrates the information about the surveys of absenteeism in certain
nation
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from
Euro
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during 2000, 2005 and 2010. The investigation presents the
causes
why
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employees did not go to work.
Overall
, there are many
differents
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differences
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in the percentages of the
reasons
for absence.
While
the number of healthy
reasons
was the highest, the opposite was seen in the stress. Starting with sick
causes
and necessary role in
family
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were the regular
reasons
. With nearly 45% of illness
causes
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in 2000 was the largest, followed by the figure in 2005 at 40%, and 2010 less 10% than 2000 at 35%, and
had
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of total
of
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rate was majority at 114% .
Moreover
,
database
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in family responsibilities,
similarly
, with the highest
belong
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to 2000,
accounted
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for 23%, more
3
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than 3
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% than both 2005 and 2010 which
were
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shared the same level.
On the other hand
,
person
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needs, unexpected problems and stress were less common
reasons
. The stressful
causes
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cause
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with the number total of 24%
was
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minority
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a minority
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, which
just
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nearly one-sixth of the most popular reason.
Additionally
, for
person
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personal
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needs in 2010 at 24%, more 10% and 3% than 2000 and 2005 respectively.
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, unpredictable issues had the figures
of
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2005 and 2010 were approximately
at
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14%,
it
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doubled
than
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7%
of
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in
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2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words causes, reasons with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

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