The graph shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over in major developed countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over in major developed countries.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The line chart illustrates the percentage of
population
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the population
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between
65-year
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65 years
old and over in the US, Sweden and
Japan
from 1940 to now and their estimated values in 2040.
Overall
, USA and Sweden demonstrated significant increases between 1940 and 2020
although
Japan
saw a slight increase over the period.
Japan
is estimated to have the most aged
population
compared to its counterparts in 2040. In 1940, the USA's
population
between
65-year
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65 years
old and older was just below 10% and
its
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it
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slowly increased to 10% before surging to just above 15% in 1980. After a drop of around 2% over a decade, its value remained relatively stable until 2020. It is set to
incline
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increase
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to around 22% in 2040. The
population
between 65 and more than 65
years
old was about 7% in 1940 and
then
its value increased gradually to below 10% in 1960.
This
proportion rose more rapidly to below 15% over the period of 20
years
before decreasing slightly. It is set to reach a quarter of the total
population
in 2040. The elderly
population
between 65
years
old and above in
Japan
was roughly 5% in 1940. It slightly dropped to around 3% in 1960 and
its
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it
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stayed relatively constant at
this
level
more
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for more
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than 20
years
. It returned
its
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to its
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1940 level between 2000 and 2010 before growing gradually until now. It is predicted to increase dramatically to around 25% in
a
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the
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short term and
reached
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reach
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to
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apply
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about 27% in 2040.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion
  • Aged population
  • Developed countries
  • Trends
  • Demographics
  • Percentage points
  • Elderly dependency ratio
  • Comparative analysis
  • Statistical data
  • Population aging
  • Societal impact
  • Policy implications
  • Age demographics
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Data interpretation
  • Forecast
  • Longevity
  • Birth rate
  • Life expectancy
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