The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates how many

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males and females read at Burnaby Public Library between 2011 and 2014.

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, the number of

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read by

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has experienced gradual growth.

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the beginning of the period women read more than

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, about 5000 and 3000

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, respectively. By 2011, the amount of

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read by

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has seen

slight

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increase,

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women read two times more than

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at that time.But after that

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started to read more and

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number sharply went up. It can be seen that

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books

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read by both

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was equalled

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10000 in 2013. After that, the amount of

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read by women has seen

considerable

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decrease and by 2014 it was almost on the level of 2012.

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men

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started to read more

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and it hit the peak in 2014, with a figure of 14000.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

145 words

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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

In some countries, people's weight has significantly increased, while their levels of health have decreased. What do you think may be the causes of this problem,and what solutions can you suggest to solve them?

Some people think that getting old is a negative thing, whereas others think it is much easier for people to live in modern society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's character and culture from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

Some think that these environmental problems are too big for individuals to be solved, while others think that governments cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals take some action Discuss both views and give your opinion.