The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates how many
books
males and females read at Burnaby Public Library between 2011 and 2014.
Overall
, the number of
books
read by
men
has experienced gradual growth.
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the beginning of the period women read more than
men
, about 5000 and 3000
books
, respectively. By 2011, the amount of
books
read by
men
has seen
slight
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increase,
while
women read two times more than
men
at that time.But after that
men
started to read more and
this
number sharply went up. It can be seen that
number
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of
books
read by both
gender
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was equalled
at
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10000 in 2013. After that, the amount of
book
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read by women has seen
considerable
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decrease and by 2014 it was almost on the level of 2012.
Whereas
men
started to read more
books
and it hit the peak in 2014, with a figure of 14000.
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