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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares the
number
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 of travellers who went travelling abroad from 1990 to 2005 from five different continents, which was counted in
millions
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.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of international travellers gradually increased throughout the given period.
In addition
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, the activities of travelling were mostly done by European citizens,
while
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 least
from
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by
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 Middle Eastern
people
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. In 1990, there were 448.9 million
people
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 from the total population in the world who went abroad for vacations. Among those travellers, 280.2 million of them were Europeans and more than one-third of the total population was dominated by Americans and Asians-Pacific. The popularity
for
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of
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 travelling overseas increased gradually until the end of the period, as the
number
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 of European pupils doubled from the previous
number
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 until it reached 400.2 million. Different cases applied to the other two countries,
nevertheless
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, since the total
folks
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number of folks
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 who are going for abroad holidays from Asia and the Pacific mainland outnumbered the Americans for 135.8
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millions
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million
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.
Albeit
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Although
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 in the end there were almost 700
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millions
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million
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people
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 going for international travelling, some continents, like Africa and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East, only accounted
below
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for less
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 than 20
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millions
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million
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 for that occasion, unless for Africans, the
number
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 almost reached 30
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millions
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million
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people
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in
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at
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 the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, millions, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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