The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The bar chart compares the changes in sales of five different phone companies in the world within a 4 years period from 2009 to 2013

Overall

, it can be seen that the two dominant companies experienced a position replacement. The majority of the surveyed companies showed upward trends with only two exceptions being

Nokia

and LG. Having overtaken the worldwide market in 2009 with nearly 450

millions

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million

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products purchased,

Nokia

witnessed a drastically declined after 2011,

ended

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ending

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apporximately

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approximately

half of its peak 4 years before.

Similarly

, LG with the beginning statistics of over 120 units sold, which is about one-fourth that of

Nokia

at the same time. In the following years, LG

user’s

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users’

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consumpsion graduallly

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consumption gradually

decreased by around 50

millions

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million

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units.

In contrast

to the negative growth seen

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the former champion in the market, Samsung whose starting point stood at around 30

millions

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million

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sales fewer than

Nokia

in 2013, dramatically surged up to twice the amount of

phone

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phones

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, surpassing its counterpart’s highest point at sharply 450

millions

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million

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phones sold in 2013. Apple

also

followed the same rise, gaining over 350% growth and

ended

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ending

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at roughly 150

millions

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million

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units purchases.

In contrast

to the former two’s

skyrocketting

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skyrocketing

, ZTE despite

also

witnessed

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witnessing

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growth, still

sood

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stood

at below 100

millions

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million

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sales with

minor

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a minor

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increase.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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4 paragraphs

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Single idea per paragraph

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Some people say that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries is a positive development, while others think that many countries will lose their national identities as a result. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world.

University students often focus on one subject. However, some people think that universities should encourage students to learn a range of other subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Write a letter to a city planning manager about demolition of a historical building in your area and say – Explain why it shouldn’t be demolished. – Suggest a future use for this building. – Recommend a way to raise money for repairs.