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The table shows the percentage of government spending on education and training and the participation of 18-24 year olds in five countries in 2012.

The table shows the percentage of government spending on education and training and the participation of 18-24 year olds in five countries in 2012.
The table provides a comparison of the
expenditure
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rate
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 of the
government
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 on
education
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 and training and the
participation
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rate
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 of 18-
24
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24-year-old
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year
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 old people in five nations in the
year
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 2002.
Overall
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, it is clearly evident from the table that the
rate
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 of
expenditure
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 on
education
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 and training by the
government
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 of
Slovenia
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 was greater than that of the other countries.
While
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 Poland’s
participation
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 of 18-24
year
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olds
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 in
education
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 and training was the highest, it was the lowest in
Romania
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. In 2002, the highest percentage of spending on
education
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 and training was by the
government
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 of
Slovenia
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 which accounted for 25%, but the
government
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expenditure
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rate
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 on the same in Poland was 5 times lower than in
Slovenia
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. A similar
rate
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 of
expenditure
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 on
education
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 and training can be seen in
Romania
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 and the Czech Republic which accounted for 10% and 9% respectively. The spending
rate
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 on
education
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 and training by the
government
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 of Hungary was more than
Romania
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 by 3% . The
participation
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 of 18-24-
year
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-
olds
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year
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olds
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 in
education
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 and training in Poland was the greatest among the given countries were 44%.
This
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rate
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 was low in
Slovenia
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 at 40%. The
participation
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rate
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 in
education
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 and training of 18-
24-
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24-year-olds-year-olds
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year
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-
olds
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year
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olds
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 in Hungary was 6% less than that of
Slovenia
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. 27% of 18-24
year
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olds
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 participated in
education
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 and training in the Czech Republic,
whereas
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 it was only 23% in
Romania
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, rate, government, education, participation, year, slovenia, olds, romania with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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