The table below illustrates information about age, average income of a person and population that is below the poverty line in California, Utal and Florida.

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The table below illustrates information about age,

average

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the average

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income of a person and population

that is

below the poverty line in

California

Utal

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Utah

and

Florida

Overall

Utal

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Utah

has the largest number of under 18

year

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old’s, whilst

Florida

has the majority of

people

who are aged over 60. The average income of a person and those who are below the poverty line are highest in

California

and

Florida

. Looking at the table in more detail, Utal has the most

people

who are under 18 the figure being 28%. For

California

and

Florida

, the numbers are relatively the same at 17 and 16%.

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Conversely

Florida

has more

people

who are over the age of 60 at 23%.

This

is nearly 3 times the statistic for Utal,which is 8 and nearly double the figure for

California

at 13. The average earning is highest in

California

followed closely by

Florida

, the numbers respectively being 23,000 and 22,000.Utal trails behind at 17,000.

However

, there are the least amount of

people

below the poverty line in Utal, 9% compared to

California

and

Florida

which are at 12 and 16.

Submitted by abeera2012 on Wed Dec 20 2023

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