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The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projecyions for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projecyions for 2050.
The assigned pie chart reflects information about the ages of the
population
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 of two nations Yemen and Italy from 2000 to 2050. It is evident from the pie chart that In the year 2000 the highest populace was younger it was half
whereas
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 15 to 59
years
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 old was less than half. ,
While
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 most lowest citizens were in 2000 the
age
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 group was 60+
years
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. In 2050 Children's will decrease community by 37.0% from 2000 and retired persons will increase by 2.1%. Meanwhile 15 to 59
years
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 old will upsurge it will be 57.3%. Probing ahead, The mankind of Italy in 2000 the
age
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 of 60+
years
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 was 24.1% the following data the
age
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 of 0 to 14
years
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 old
population
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 was 14.3%. The working aged groups were more than a third quarter. After that, In 2050 the oldest mankind will increment by 42.3%.
Subsequently
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, juveniles will be reduced by the us
population
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 by 3.2% which will be 11.5% rather than in the year 2000. Eventually, the
age
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 of the working stage will be 46.2%. Overview, Assuming
years
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 in Yemen highest prediction of the
population
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 of children and in Italy be lowest
population
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 is 11.5%

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, years, age with synonyms.
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