The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
The line chart illustrates the data of
inquiries
received by the travel agent
information
office in one city over a
half year
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period in 2011.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the number of
inquiries
received
by
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in person and
telephone
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by telephone
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rose significantly,
while
the rate of
inquiries
received by letter or email
decline
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sharply during the period. Looking for more details, the
inquiries
received
by
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in person went up significantly
at
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from
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400
information
to above 1,800 advice.
Moreover
, by telephone
for
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inquiries
received rose gradually from above 8000
information
to 1,400
information
. Regarding
to
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the
inquiries
received by letter or email declined sharply
at
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from
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around 600 advice to under 400 advice between January to
Juny
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June
in
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2011.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words inquiries, information with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • in person
  • by letter/email
  • by telephone
  • general trend
  • six-month period
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • fluctuations
  • monthly data
  • comparison
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