In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
It is believed that purchasing a new home is better than renting one.
People
think it will be much safer if they just buy a house
instead
of paying for it every month. This
decision will lead to the negative development for people
. Analyzing the financial risks for homeholders, as well as
the limitations for mobility of house
owners will prove this
.
Firstly
, despite the absence of monthly fees, owning a home can lead to problems with mortgages for owners who have it. Also
, the economic fluctuations in the real estate economy increase the financial risks if property values decline. For example
, every ten years there is a housing crisis in some countries, and individuals who own their real estate can lose a great amount of their money because of this
. Therefore
, it is not rational to buy a house
at the full price, instead
of renting it.
Secondly
, people
who buy accommodation for living will face limitations of mobility. For instance
, a person who pays only for the rent can live in any place, while
an individual who bought a house
in the past is tied to the same location. Moreover
, a person most likely will be going to the same job with the same salary because it is near the dwelling and it will limit his or her opportunities. Thus
, this
becomes apparent that renting a house
is more appropriate, rather than purchasing it.
In conclusion, the belief that owning an accommodation is important may overlook potential downsides. This
decision will lead to the negative development for people
. Therefore
, it is clear that
the idea of renting a home is the right decision.Submitted by aldosik0287 on
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Task Achievement
To improve your score in Task Achievement, make sure to fully address both components of the prompt. You were expected to discuss why home ownership might be important to people as well as give your opinion on whether it's a positive or negative development. Ensure that you provide a balanced discussion covering both aspects.
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