The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the amount of money
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply

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collected and spent by a children's organization in the United States in 2016.
Overall
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, the primary source of money collected through food donations and community contributions made a significant amount.
However
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, the main expenditure item was program services in 2016. The
children
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children's

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charity collected almost $53 million and 600 thousand and the vast majority of income
made
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was made

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by donated food with nearly 87% in 2016.
While
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community contributions to the income
was
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were

The singular verb was does not appear to agree with the plural subject contributions. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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just over a tenth, program revenue helped around only a minor proportion of 2.2%. The total
of
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apply

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remaining sources
such
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as investment income, government grants and other sources only contributed an insignificant fraction. A drastic amount of the revenue
spent
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was spent

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on program services with 95.8% of
$
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the $

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53,224,896 expenditure in 2016. Fundraising
event
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events

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and management and general were nearly 3% and 2% respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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