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The table below gives information about the percentage of workforce employed in six industries in Australia between 1989 and 2009.

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The
table
 below gives
information
 about the
percentage
 of
workforce
 employed in
six
industries
 in
Australia
 between 1989 and 2009.The
table
 below gives
information
 about the
percentage
 of
workforce
 employed in
six
industries
 in
Australia
 between 1989 and 2009.The
table
 below gives
information
 about the
percentage
 of
workforce
 employed in
six
industries
 in
Australia
 between 1989 and 2009.The
table
 below gives
information
 about the
percentage
 of
workforce
 employed in
six
industries
 in
Australia
 between 1989 and 2009.The
table
 below gives
information
 about the
percentage
 of
workforce
 employed in
six
industries
 in
Australia
 between 1989 and 2009.The
table
 below gives
information
 about the
percentage
 of
workforce
 employed in
six
industries
 in
Australia
 between 1989 and 2009.The
table
 below gives
information
 about the
percentage
 of
workforce
 employed in
six
industries
 in
Australia
 between 1989 and 2009.The
table
 below gives
information
 about the
percentage
 of
workforce
 employed in
six
industries
 in
Australia
 between 1989 and 2009.
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