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The diagram show a museum and its surroundings in 1990 and 2010

The diagram show a museum and its surroundings in 1990 and 2010
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The maps above show a museum and its layouts in two moments: in 1990 and 2010. There are some differences explained next.
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, the most
significantly
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 changes from 1990 to 2010 were that the cottage area was replaced by a cafe, and the car park increased along the old garden, in 2010. There were four small exhibition rooms in 1990 and in
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the latter
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latter
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later
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 it
was reduce
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was reduced
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 to only two exhibition rooms, but clearly greater. Some trees were moved in the area close to the car park, which was increased over the old garden. The shop in the previous layout became larger in the layout in 2010 but kept in the same place. It seems that the entrance and the store room were unchanged.
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, some trees were moved near to the car park, the main path was reduced in width, and the garden was transformed
in
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 another area for parking.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduce" was used 2 times.
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