The graph below represents the total of exports of clothing from 3 different countries over a time period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below represents the total of exports of clothing from 3 different countries over a time period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the international clothing trading (in millions of dollars) from
three
separate nations – Colombia,
Japan
, and
Myanmar
between 1990 and 2013.
Overall
,
Myanmar
experienced a significant fluctuation,
while
Japan
and Colombia saw only a minor change in sales. From 1990 to 2011, all
three
countries witnessed an increase in the
numbers
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of
exporting
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.
Myanmar
did not have any trading activities at the beginning,
however
, rocketed to 800 in 2000. The figures still continued climbing to reach
at
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approximately 920.
Similarly
, Colombia’s clothing
exporting
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rose consistently from around 450 to 650 in the first 21 years.
Japan
. Starting the highest at nearly 580, end at the lowest at 600 in total sales. In the
last
three
years, there was a
decline
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trend in the
numbers
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of selling clothing
oversea
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across
three
countries.
Japan
and
Myanmar
decreased slowly by 50 and 100 respectively between 2011 and 2013. At the same time,
Myanmar
’s sales plunged by at least 600, which
then
quickly recovered to around 420.
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