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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

Technology has been developed a
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e-
books
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 and newspapers. It is believed that, in the future, people will no longer purchase printed
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 or
books
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 as they will be able to read everything online.
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, they do not have to pay. Personally, it is true that printed
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 and
books
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 will be replaced by
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electronic ones
due to
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 various advantages. There are reasons to support the claim.
To begin
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.
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, the cost will be reduced. Paper is the main material for producing printed
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. The companies will no longer have to use the paper which costs them a
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 money.
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, they can simply write the news on their website.
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, the cost of the raw material will decrease.
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, it is environmentally friendly. In order to produce newspapers, the trees will be cut to produce the papers, which is the cause of environmental issues nowadays. If papers are no longer used in the production of
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, cutting trees is not necessary anymore.
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 will not suffer from cutting trees to produce the printed
newspaper
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. For the e-book, there are
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 many advantages. The first advantage is that it is easier to access. Students can simply
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download anything they want from the internet within minutes.
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, it is a
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 easier for the students to get
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educational material
such
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book
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books
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 online.
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,
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 of carrying all of the printed
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, youngsters can just carry their electronic devices with them, and they have everything necessary for their study.
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 means that e-book facilitates them in studying, allowing them to study any time and
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 they want. In conclusion, there is no doubt that printed
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 and newspapers will be replaced by
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electronic ones as they have a
lot
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 more advantages to the environment, producers, and people who read the news.

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coherence cohesion
Be sure to organize your essay into clear paragraphs; each should contain one main idea. Transition signals between paragraphs would enhance readability and cohesion.
coherence cohesion
You've presented a reasonable introduction and conclusion, but both could be strengthened with clearer thesis statements and summary points that directly address the scope of the statement.
coherence cohesion
Develop your main points with a variety of supporting examples. Common examples could be replaced with more specific and contextualized ones relevant to the claim being made.
task achievement
Address the task by fully responding to all parts of the prompt. While your essay touches on the general ideas, it should delve deeper into explaining why the outcome you describe is likely.
task achievement
Clarify and develop your ideas regarding the shift from print to digital media. The discussion would benefit from a more comprehensive exploration of the advantages and potential disadvantages.
task achievement
Use specific examples to substantiate your arguments. Real-world data, studies, or predictions can significantly strengthen the persuasiveness of your essay.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Digital content
  • Environmental concerns
  • Tactile experience
  • Production costs
  • Distribution costs
  • Digital divide
  • Digital fatigue
  • Print media
  • Credibility
  • Permanence
  • Collectibility
  • Aesthetic value
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