The table and charts below give information on the police bugjet for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The table chart illustrates the data
of
on the Change preposition
apply
police
cost;whereas
the histogram charts provide information about how the money
was spent in small area
of Britain between 2017 and 2018. Fix the agreement mistake
areas
Overall
, it is clear that
the total of
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police
budget rose steadily, while
the information of
how the Change preposition
on
money
was spent for
salariesChange preposition
on
was
declined sharply during the period.
Looking for more details Unnecessary verb
apply
of
Change preposition
in
table
, the sources of Add an article
the table
police
budget were four differents
types from 2017 to 2018. Correct your spelling
different
Moreover
, the all of types sources
of Change preposition
of sources
police
cost
increased sharply. Fix the agreement mistake
costs
Similarly
, at National Govermant
rose from 175.5m to 177.8m and by Local Taxes, 102.3m increased from 91.2m. Correct your spelling
government
Furthermore
, from other sources went up to 85,5m by started
38m.
Verb problem
apply
According to
the pie charts, the police
budget by
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how
Rephrase
apply
it
was distributed were three different types Correct pronoun usage
apply
by
the same token. Change preposition
of
However
, the police
who spent Correct quantifier usage
number of police
money
for
salaries went down sharply from 75% to 60%,Change preposition
on
while
, for
the person who spent Change preposition
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money
for
technology rose sharply Change preposition
on
at
8% to 14%. Change preposition
from
In contrast
, the police
who spent money
for
buildings and transport Change preposition
on
remaind
stable at 17%.Correct your spelling
remained
remains
remain
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