The pie chart compares the average household spending in two different countries in terms of five important categories in 2010.

The pie chart compares the average household spending in two different countries in terms of five important categories in 2010.
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The chart above depicts information about common domestic spending concerning five distinct categories in Japan and
Malaysia
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in the year 2010, and it is measured in percentage. As it is observed, the Japanese like to splurge for other goods and services,
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Malaysians are more interested in owning properties.  It is conspicuous that Japanese and Malaysian households have different priorities when it comes to their needs.
To begin
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with, residence for couples who live in
Malaysia
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is indispensable,
accounted
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for 34 per cent,
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in Japan it is lower with approximately 21 per cent.
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, food which is a crucial thing for living stands at a 27 rate in
Malaysia
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Japan shares nearly the same figure as a 24 ratio. Moving on to the third essential need of the residents in
Malaysia
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is other goods and services (26%).
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, additional products and assistance are the largest proportion in The Land of The Rising Sun.
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, vehicles play a major role in Japanese households with a figure of 20%
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in the opposite country possessed only half of it. Followed by health care which has the smallest amount of number in both nations compared to other classifications.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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