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The table and chart below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. Table shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and chart below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. Table shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table shows the
sources
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 of the
police
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budget
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 (in £
m
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)
while
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 the pie charts give information about how the money was spent in a particular region of Britain in 2017 and 2018.
Overall
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, the main source for the
police
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budget
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 was the National Government among other
sources
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 and the
budget
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 experienced an increasing
budget
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 from all the
sources
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.
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 the expense for salaries decreased, it still had a lion's share compared to other expenditures. The total
police
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budget
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 in 2017 was 304.7m and grew to 318.6 in 2018. As the biggest funder,
National
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the National
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 Government allocated 175.5
m
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 in 2017 and added around 2m in the next year,
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 local taxes
also
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 gave almost 100
m
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 in 2017 and over 100m in 2018.
In addition
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, other
sources
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 like
grantalso
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grants also
 contribute likely 38
m
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. There was a change in terms of budgeting for salaries and technology. The former experienced a decrease from 75% to 69%,
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 the latter experienced a growth from almost 10% to 14%.
On the other hand
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, the
police
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 only spent 17% on buildings and transport.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, police, budget, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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