The line chart shows average attendance at the cinema among various age groups in the US from 2000 to 2011

The line chart shows average attendance at the cinema among various age groups in the US from 2000 to 2011
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The line chart below illustrates the average rate of attendance of various age groups going to the cinema between 2000 to 2011.
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, the rate for all age groups proceeding to the cinema increased over the 11 years. The majority of those belong to the 15-24 category, whilst the least are in the
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section. Looking at the chart in more detail, those aged between 15-24 started at 15% in the year 2000.
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went on to rise before experiencing many fluctuations between 2006 and 2008. After 2008 more than half of
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category attended the cinema, increasing to a peak of 55 before dropping slightly to 51% in 2011.
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, the 35 and over had a figure of 2 in 2000.
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had a moderate rise throughout the years with a slight decline in 2008, before
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again to around 10% in 2011. The 7-14 and 25-35 year olds underwent many fluctuations over
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time period. 7-14 began at 10, whilst 25-35 were at half of
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statistic. Over the course of
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11 years, both age ranges had many fluctuating patterns but eventually stopped at an equal number of 20% in 2011.
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