The chart below shows the results of a svrvey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Austrian cities

The chart below shows the results of a svrvey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Austrian cities
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This
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pie chart displays how much
of
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apply
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tea and
coffee
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consumed
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is consumed
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by the population
from
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of
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cities
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of
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in
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Australia. The x-axis shows the five
cities
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such
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as Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane,
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Adelaide
and Hobart
while
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the y-axis illustrates the percentage of city
people
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.
Firstly
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, it is very clear that in all five
cities
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people
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are interested
to buy
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in buying
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drinks directly from the café in the
last
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four weeks.
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first
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the first
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analysis
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analysis,
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64% of
people
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from Melbourne and 62% from Sydney went to café for drinks when
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compared
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with the
amount
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number
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of
people
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who bought fresh or
instant
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coffee
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during
past
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32 days.
However
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, those who paid for the
instant
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and fresh
coffee
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from Syndey and Melbourne are almost similar with a slight difference in
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the range
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of
people
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. Alternatively, 34% of
people
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paid for fresh
coffee
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in Brisbane and Adelaide. But in
Adelaid
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Adelaide
Almost 50% took brand new
coffee
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and
instant
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coffee
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.
Furthermore
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, 63% of humans from Hobart got
coffee
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or tea straight from the shop,
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likewise
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less than 40% took fresh
coffee
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and 54% got
instant
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coffee
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in
past
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the past
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4 weeks. To summarise, though
people
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from these five
cities
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have different drinking habits
but
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most of them
preferred
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prefer
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to drink
coffee
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or tea directly from the shop.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities, people, instant with synonyms.
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