The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
The line graph illustrates
information
about the
number
of
enquiries
the Tourist
Information
Office received in one city from
January
to
June
in
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2011
Overall
the
number
of
enquiries
received by the Tourist
Information
Office in person and by telephone increased in six months,
while
number
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the number
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of
enquiries
by letter and email slightly decreased between
January
and
June
in 2011. The data on figures shows that the
number
of
enquiries
received in person had dramatically increased approximately from 400 to 1900 over a period of six months.
Although
the
number
of
enquiries
received by telephone between
January
and April is a period of slight volatility
aroun
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around
900 to 1000, from April to
June
there was
sharp
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increase from 1000 to 1600. Despite the data on figures gives
information
that the
number
of
enquiries
received by letter and emails remained stable at 600 to 800 from
January
to March.
However
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the
number
of
enquiries
by letter/email fell from about 700 to 350 between March and
June
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words information, number, enquiries, january, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • in person
  • by letter/email
  • by telephone
  • general trend
  • six-month period
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • fluctuations
  • monthly data
  • comparison
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