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The table below shows the percentages of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011.

The table below shows the percentages of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011.
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The table gives a comparison of population proportion in one town who rode bicycles in 2011 between five
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 groups.
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, most cycling
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 of both
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 are children between
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 0-9,
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 of adults between
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 40-59, which proportion are lowest. Data on the figures illustrates that children between
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 0-9 have small difference in
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: females are 51.4% and males are 50.3%. Next
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group
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 between 10-17 shows the significant change in proportion: 42.2% and 24.6% respectively.
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 between 18-39 experienced dramatically fall in both
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 to 17.1% and 9.7% respectively. Compared with other
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 groups,
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 between 40-59 illustrates the lowest usage of bicycle in both
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: females are 12.3% and males are 8%.
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 data on the figures shows that adults 60 and more olds preferred ride bicycles more than other adults
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 groups and experienced slightly increase 18.5% and 13.2% respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, genders with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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