The table below shows the percentages of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011.
The table gives a comparison of population proportion in one town who rode bicycles in 2011 between five
age
groups.
Overall
, most cycling group
of both genders
are children between age
0-9, in contrast
of adults between age
40-59, which proportion are lowest.
Data on the figures illustrates that children between age
0-9 have small difference in genders
: females are 51.4% and males are 50.3%. Next age
group
between 10-17 shows the significant change in proportion: 42.2% and 24.6% respectively. Age
group
between 18-39 experienced dramatically fall in both genders
to 17.1% and 9.7% respectively.
Compared with other age
groups, age
group
between 40-59 illustrates the lowest usage of bicycle in both genders
: females are 12.3% and males are 8%. Finally
data on the figures shows that adults 60 and more olds preferred ride bicycles more than other adults age
groups and experienced slightly increase 18.5% and 13.2% respectively.Submitted by hebibli.eli on
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