The table below shows the percentages of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011.

The table below shows the percentages of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011.
The table gives a comparison of population proportion in one town who rode bicycles in 2011 between five
age
groups.
Overall
, most cycling
group
of both
genders
are children between
age
0-9,
in contrast
of adults between
age
40-59, which proportion are lowest. Data on the figures illustrates that children between
age
0-9 have small difference in
genders
: females are 51.4% and males are 50.3%. Next
age
group
between 10-17 shows the significant change in proportion: 42.2% and 24.6% respectively.
Age
group
between 18-39 experienced dramatically fall in both
genders
to 17.1% and 9.7% respectively. Compared with other
age
groups,
age
group
between 40-59 illustrates the lowest usage of bicycle in both
genders
: females are 12.3% and males are 8%.
Finally
data on the figures shows that adults 60 and more olds preferred ride bicycles more than other adults
age
groups and experienced slightly increase 18.5% and 13.2% respectively.
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