Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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have
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freedom
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the freedom
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to choose the
country
to
work
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Some
people
think with different
approach
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approaches
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specifically with two professions which are doctors and engineers. The one group of
people
thinks these two professionals should
work
in the
country
where they learned skills to perform these jobs which might be based on different observations and thoughts. These
people
think
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point
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of view of the specific county’s growth. Let’s say
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of
Asian
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the Asian
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country
India, Where
people
think
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the doctor
a doctor
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doctor
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doctors
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should serve
for
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their own
people
only
instead
of moving abroad. They mention that working in
same
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county
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country
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will help to motivate the local young generation to become doctors and engineers.
This
approach should be based on nationalism and emotion. Some
people
believe that every engineer and doctors have
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the freedom
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to
work
anywhere they want.
Work
Opportunities are good
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abroad for these professionals which is good for their professional and financial growth. One more important reason for
this
is they will get to learn different
work
cultures
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and technologies
which they can implement in the
country
where they have taken their training which will help directly to the growth of that
country
. Moving to
other
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another country
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country
for
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perform these jobs is
great
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a great
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perspective of cultural
exchanges
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. They can share
these knowledge
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this knowledge
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though
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through
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different platforms too so they can help their
people
to get
this
knowledge. They think every
country
have
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something to learn which is true and they think helping, Motivating and supporting can
in
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be in
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different
way
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ways
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by staying in other countries too. These are the reasons behind
this
mixed view of two
group
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groups
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of
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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