In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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present world, technology has made our lives faster and easier.
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,
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a number of people prefer to read
books
on their mobile phones and laptops rather than choosing physical
books
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personally
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in favour of
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benefits overpower the drawbacks and in my next few paragraphs,
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will discuss
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this
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with, the main advantage of using
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books
is that we can carry any kind of book conveniently
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our
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and tablets. In order to read articles or magazines, we do not have to purchase
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physically if we
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use
e-
books
.
For instance
, ‘kindle’ a platform provided by Amazon company is famous for its ebook collections. It provides various
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of
books
with amazing features which can enhance the reading experience. It gives
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to Store more than
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books
without lack of any storage and it is not possible for us to store these numbers of
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at home.</p>
In addition
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more advantages of electronic media.
Firstly
, we can access it at any time without depending on its availability in shops.
Secondly
, many applications provide amazing features which can help
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to enjoy the process of reading.And
last
but not least, we can get a chance to read
books
without any cost. Various
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provide access to free
e-
books
which are not possible to read in shops.</p>
On the other hand
, there are few downgrades of
e-
books
. First of all, it will cause serious
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if we
use
them in
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run Constantly without taking breaks.
Moreover
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screens of mobiles,
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has to concentrate more and
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more
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due to
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it will lead to problems
such
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process of
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.</p> In Conclusion,
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personally think that it will
alway
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always
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how we
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things for
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. If we
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e-
books
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manner
then
its merits are very much as compared to demerits.
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