the chart below shows the total number of minutes in billions of telephone calls in the Uk divided in to three categories, from 1995-2002

the chart below shows the total number of minutes in billions of telephone calls in the Uk divided in to three categories, from 1995-2002
The chart given illustrates the entire
time
of
telephone
calls in the UK, separated into three groups namely local, national and international, and
mobiles
from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
, it can be seen that local
telephone
calls had the highest
time
among the three categories,
however
, the opposite was true for
mobiles
. Since 1995, the total number of minutes of local
telephone
calls reached the highest peak all over
the
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time
and continued to increase from 74
billion
to approximately 90
billion
until 1999. The
mobiles
had the lowest
time
and were enhanced by
time
just like the locals. From 1999 to 2002, the
time
of local
telephone
calls seemed to decrease which is contra to the past. There was
also
a dramatic change in the total minutes of
mobiles
which
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12
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billion
to over 40
billion
.
Although
, after 8 years we can see that the national and
internation
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international
phone calls had the most sustained increase among
three
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groups.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, telephone, mobiles, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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