Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos while others say that there are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

The wild

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animals

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crucial across the world. Some claim that wild creatures should not be kept in

zoos

while

others say that there are good reasons for having

zoos

in nations. I strongly agree with the former opinion for the following reasons. On the one hand, wild species should not be kept in

zoos

because many

animals

are getting diseases and dying

due to

lack of space.

This

means

,

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wild

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that wild

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animals

are

keeping

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kept

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in small cages and spaces

while

many cannot survive longer as compared to

survive

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surviving

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in

forest

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forests

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.

For example

, tigers are affected enormously when it keeps in

zoos

for the reason

lack

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of space. These

animals

should not be kept in

zoos

.

On the other hand

, having

zoos

in countries

for attracting

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attracts

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and

boosting

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boosts

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the tourism sector in order to gain more earnings from

this

. To clarify, many tourists like to see the rare

animals

in

zoos

,

therrlefore

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therefore

, they travel from far away.

For instance

, the rare species of chines panda, Indian tiger and

Africa

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rhino are kept in

zoos

for attracting

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to attract

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the

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tourists unlike they cannot see it anywhere.

Hence

, having

zoos

in nations the important reason is attracting the

traveler

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traveller

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to gain more earnings. Both

view

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put forward valid points,

however

, I strongly believe that

zoos

are

the

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not

place

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a place

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for wild

animals

and they should be

independently

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in their natural places which is

forest

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forests

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.

The rare

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Rare

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animals

and creatures have to be protected by

the

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apply

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wild animal conservation

instead

of

zoos

. The authorities should

lookafter

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look after

this

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these

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reservation places.

To conclude

,

although

some people think that

zoos

can get more earnings from tourism, I feel that wild

animals

should not be kept in

cage

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cages

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instead

of

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it

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they

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should

protect

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be protected

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in wild animal reservation locations.