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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want on/ine without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some believe that in the future,
people
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 will not purchase printed newspapers or books
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 the ability to read the free ones. I agree with the statement about no one purchasing printed editions but I totally do not agree about the reason given. Nowadays,
people
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 are interested in reading many digital
versions
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 of newspapers or books more than printed ones.
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 happens because the digital
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 are easy to get and bring anywhere and anytime rather than the printed ones.
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, by having a digital version,
people
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 can save it on their Kindle or smartphone so that they can read the book anywhere and anytime.
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, the trend of reading a printed version is going to decrease year by year.
On the other hand
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,
although
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 the digital
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 are available on the Internet,
people
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 still need to pay to have them.
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, if
people
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 want to consume a daily digital newspaper, they should pay for a subscription. The price of digital sources is more likely cheaper than purchasing the printed
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 but they still have to pay given that the publishers gain the revenue to hire the editors, writers, and all of the employees from the purchasing cost.
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, it is wrong if
people
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 can get them for free. In conclusion, I totally believe that in the future many
people
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 will not purchase any printed newspaper or book
due to
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 the availability and flexibility of the digital version.
However
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, they still have to pay for the digital newspaper or book.

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task achievement
Your essay partially addresses the task, but the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement has not been fully developed or explained. To improve, ensure that your opinion throughout the essay is clear and that you fully address all parts of the task in a more detailed manner.
coherence cohesion
Your essay demonstrates an adequate logical structure, with clear topics introduced in each paragraph. However, some points may not be fully elaborated, and the flow between ideas can be improved. Consider enhancing the connectivity of ideas and information throughout the essay using a wider range of cohesive devices and transitional phrases.
coherence cohesion
While the introduction and conclusion are present, they do not fully encapsulate the main points of your arguments or your overall perspective. A stronger introduction should outline your main points, while the conclusion should summarize your position more definitively.
coherence cohesion
The main points in your essay seem inconsistently supported. Some paragraphs contain assertions that would benefit from specific examples or evidence. To strengthen your arguments, incorporate more detailed examples and data where appropriate.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital media
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • instant updates
  • eco-friendly
  • ad-revenue models
  • subscriptions
  • institutional licenses
  • tangible experience
  • collectible
  • gift economy
  • reading habits
  • digital divide
  • socio-economic factors
  • niche markets
  • e-readers
  • replicate
  • preservation
  • archiving
  • historical records
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