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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#internet #newspapers
Nowadays internet
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 becoming the most popular option, in order to gain the latest information. Some people say,
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 online
media
 will replace the position of
newspapers
, as the latter
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 considered
as
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a part of the past. In some ways, the
newspapers
 might lose
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 place in the market. Through
this
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why
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 I agree with the statement.
Firstly
, the cost to produce a newspaper cannot match the expense
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 publishing
an online news
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. As we know
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the
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online
media
 does not need anything to be printed.
This
 efficiency issue might be the reason why the
newspapers
 cannot stand in the competition anymore, since the publishing world has become very money-oriented.
Therefore
, some of the news companies have expanded their portfolio in the digital
media
.
Secondly
,
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newspapers
 will lose
its
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their
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 market segment
due to
 the evolution of electronic devices. Currently, people are very dependent
to
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 gadgets and other similar things.
However
, the massive growth of technology will
also
 help the expansion of digital
media
.
In addition
,
the
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technological advancement will help the information
spreads
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 faster than before, something that could not be applied in
a
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printed
media
. In conclusion, as the newspaper
categorized
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 as the
media
 of the past, people will start looking for other options. The other options might be the one with lower cost and more compatible with current technology
such
 as the online
media
 or news websites.
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,
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newspaper producers might still have time to protect
its
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 business by developing digital platforms.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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