The pie charts show the percentsge of five sorts of books sold in bookstore in 1972, 1992 and 2012.
The provided pie charts indicate the volume of five sorts of
books
such
as adult
fiction
, children
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children's
fiction
, biography, travel and others sold in bookstore
in 1972, 1992 and 2012.
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bookstores
Overall
, it can be
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is
apparently
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apparent
visible
that Correct word choice
apply
adult
fiction
books
gain huge popularity
over the period. In contrast
, popularity
of biography mitigated significantly.
In detail, both Add an article
the popularity
fiction
books
for adult
and for kids Fix the agreement mistake
adults
was
sold 20 Unnecessary verb
apply
percent
in 1972, their Change the spelling
per cent
popularity
went up after two decades and stood at 25% and 22% respectively, while
adult
fiction
became the most popular book
in 2012 by
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with
45
% sale rate, Correct article usage
a 45
fiction
book
for kids reached to 25% as the second popular book
.
Nevertheless
, sale
rate for three kinds of other Correct article usage
the sale
books
declined during 40 years. Whereas
sale figure
for other Fix the agreement mistake
sales figures
books
halved from 1972 to 2012 from 25% to 12%, travel books
after a slight surge in 1992 reached to
18% from 15% in 1972 eventually Change preposition
apply
fall
to 10% in 2012. Wrong verb form
fell
Additionally
, biography books
have been the second favorite book
between
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among
booklover
and Fix the agreement mistake
booklovers
was
equal with Correct subject-verb agreement
were
fiction
books
decrease
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decreased
a
quarter Change preposition
by a
of
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in
its
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apply
popularity
in 1992, finally
in Rephrase
apply
2012
it became the Add a comma
2012,
least sold
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least-sold
book
in bookstore
by 8%.Fix the agreement mistake
bookstores
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, adult, fiction, popularity, book with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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