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Transport preference among young people in different countries.

#transport #people #countries
The bar chart illustrates, transport
preference
 among the United
Kingdom
, United States,
France
 and Italy by younger generation in a year.
Overall
, the travel
preference
 among young ones fluctuated during the year in all the countries. Despite
of
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the fluctuations,
car
transportation
 was highly preferred above
bicycle
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bicycles
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 and
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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 by young people By analysing the data,
the
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car
transportation
prefered
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preferred
 in the United
Kingdom
 was at the level of 60% it
remain
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 unchanged in
United
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Kingdom
, but in
France
 it suddenly
downback
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down back
down-back
 to 40% .
Then
, it peaked to above 70% in Italy.
Incase
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 of bicycle
transportation
, there was
huge
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 fluctuation throughout the countries. In the United
Kingdom
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Kingdom,
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 it leveled at 30%,
Then
 dramatically went down to 10% in
United
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 States. But, it backed up sharply in
France
 at above 40%.
Then
, it backed down to approximately 10% in Italy Motorcycle
transportation
 became constant throughout all the different countries at 10%.
The
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car
 transport reached
the
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a
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 High point of above 70% in Italy, it was the Highest of all
in
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compared with other
transportations
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transportation
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. Only time
were
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car
preference
 went down below 40% at the same time bicycle
preference
 went up by above 40% in
France
 by
young
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the young
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 generation.
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