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The charts illustrate the number of people affected by four types of noise pollution day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007. Summarize and make comparison where relevant.

The charts illustrate the number of people affected by four types of noise pollution day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007. Summarize and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar
chats
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chart
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show
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shows
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show
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,
people
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that people
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count which
Verb problem
were
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 disturbed by 4 noise pollution types
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the whole
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whole
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the whole
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 day in 2007. The units are given by millions.
Majority
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The majority
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 of
noice
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noise
 in cities and rural areas ,
overall
, contained traffic
both
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in both
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of
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apply
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rural and urban areas
unlike
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, unlike
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 industry. As can be seen from charts, voice affected
more
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apply
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more people in day than night,
while
 city than rural areas. Traffic noise
affect
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affects
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 about 60 and 40 million persons
in
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apply
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day and night respectively.
In addition
, Train and Aircraft sound affected only approximately 8
millions
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million
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 people.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrate
  • number of people
  • affected by
  • types of noise pollution
  • cities
  • rural areas
  • comparison
  • relevant
  • daytime
  • nighttime
  • summarize
  • main findings
  • conclusion
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