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The use of cell phones (mobile phones) has grown rapidly in the past few years. People use them for both business and personal reasons. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the widespread use of cell phones (mobile phones)? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Technology has taken over our lives and its traces have been more obvious after the invention of
the
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smartphones
.
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 of
smartphones
 is increasing day by day.
People
 are drawn to
use
phone
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 for trade and particular reasons. I think the merits of using phones outweigh its demerits and
this
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smarphones
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smartphones
 has some grave consequences. To start with, excessive
use
 of
smartphones
 is
time consuming
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. thereby, making you fall back behind with your work.
For example
, some
people
 spend large chunks of their time in
some
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communication applications
due to
 peer pressure.
In addition
, we could be unsupervised
while
 we
use
 our phones, we are more likely to be exposed
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 which might not be
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appropriate
 for us and it can take a huge toll on our mental health. As a
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result
, it is somehow
plausibe
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plausible
 that it is considered a negative trend.
On the other hand
, the proper
use
 of
smartphones
 brings innumerable
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points
.
Firstly
,
smartphones
are provided
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 tremendous opportunities for
people
 ,
such
 as banking applications and shopping websites so
it
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makes
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 us do enormous work easier in
this
 technology-focused world.
Moreover
, phones contribute to
people
 staying in
contacts
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 with their friends or colleagues, and
people
 can set up some meetings related to work so they can sign myriad contracts and make huge profits. As a
resault
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result
, it can be certainly said it is not only beneficial but
also
 necessary. All things considered,
although
 there are some negative repercussions in the excessive
use
 of
smartphones
,
such
 as being
time consuming
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 and encountering
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inappropriate
appropriate
context
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contexts
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, there are more positive aspects ,
such
 as offering various types of applications and communicating easier with different
poeople
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people
.
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