Many people support the development of agriculture, such as factory farming and creation of new fruits and vegetables. Others oppose this idea. Present both views.

Developing agricultural methods has been one of the most controversial issues
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recent years.
While
some
people
agree with the flourishing the
agriculture
including establishing new types of fruits and vegetables, others have different
attitude
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toward these transformations. On one hand, it is dramatically accepted by a large variety of
people
important to consider all the consequences of any kind of progress in
agriculture
. For one thing, thriving methods of
agriculture
will lead
in producing
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to the production of
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fruits and vegetables which have special features
that
is
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imperative for specific purposes
such
as medical ones.
Moreover
, if
agriculture
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the agriculture
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farming industry goes up, more
people
will immigrate to rural
district
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districts
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and there
would
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be a significant decrease in
demanding
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to
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devastating urban facilities
and
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additionally
results
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result
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in a great decrease in air pollution and
explosion
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the explosion
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of population.
On the other hand
,
people
with totally opposite
idea
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ideas
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and oppose any
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methods of
agriculture
have compelling justifications as well. The strongest idea reason would be that since any manipulation in the process of
agriculture
will result in
producing
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the production of
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new types of fruits and vegetables, they may have non-refundable irreversible effects on the body and cause unknown diseases. On top of
this
, any progress may reduce
demands
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the demands
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of employees to the
workforces
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, so the more development in
agriculture
takes place, the more rate of unemployment will increase which will have crucial dire consequences including financial problems
that
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is a fundamental issue in the society. In conclusion, regarding
to
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the transformations in the method of
agriculture
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agriculture,
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some
people
have positive ideas
while
others are opposed to them. As both groups have acceptable reasons it is essential that
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both attitude
both attitudes
are considered in order to get the most advantages.
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