Many people support the development of agriculture, such as factory farming and creation of new fruits and vegetables. Others oppose this idea. Present both views.
Developing agricultural methods has been one of the most controversial issues
during
recent years. Change preposition
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While
some people
agree with the flourishing the agriculture
including establishing new types of fruits and vegetables, others have different attitude
toward these transformations.
On one hand, it is dramatically accepted by a large variety of Fix the agreement mistake
attitudes
people
important to consider all the consequences of any kind of progress in agriculture
. For one thing, thriving methods of agriculture
will lead in producing
fruits and vegetables which have special features Wrong verb form
to the production of
that
is
imperative for specific purposes Change the verb form
are
such
as medical ones. Moreover
, if agriculture
farming industry goes up, more Correct article usage
the agriculture
people
will immigrate to rural district
and there Fix the agreement mistake
districts
would
be a significant decrease in Wrong verb form
will
demanding
Replace the word
demand
to
devastating urban facilities Change preposition
for
and
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which
additionally
results
in a great decrease in air pollution and Wrong verb form
result
explosion
of population.
Add an article
the explosion
an explosion
On the other hand
, people
with totally opposite idea
and oppose any Fix the agreement mistake
ideas
develop
methods of Wrong verb form
developed
agriculture
have compelling justifications as well. The strongest idea reason would be that since any manipulation in the process of agriculture
will result in producing
new types of fruits and vegetables, they may have non-refundable irreversible effects on the body and cause unknown diseases. On top of Replace the word
the production of
this
, any progress may reduce demands
of employees to the Correct article usage
the demands
workforces
, so the more development in Fix the agreement mistake
workforce
agriculture
takes place, the more rate of unemployment will increase which will have crucial dire consequences including financial problems that
is a fundamental issue in the society.
In conclusion, regarding Correct pronoun usage
which
to
the transformations in the method of Remove the preposition
apply
agriculture
some Add a comma
agriculture,
people
have positive ideas while
others are opposed to them. As both groups have acceptable reasons it is essential that bothattitude
are considered in order to get the most advantages.Correct your spelling
both attitude
both attitudes
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