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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011
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The given line graph illustrates the number of
questions
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 which are answered by the tourist information office in a town from
January
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 to June 2011.
Overall
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, there were three types of information received by the tourist office : in person, by letter/
email
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 and by
telephone
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. It can be seen that from
January
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 to June, face-to-face
questions
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 and by
telephone
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 were the highest enquiries obtained,
whereas
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questions
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 gained by letter/
email
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 were the least. Turning into the information in more detail, we can see that In
January
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, despite the fact that more than 400 inquiries were obtained in person
questions
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, It rose gradually to 1000 enquiries in the middle of March before overtaking
telephone
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 to the first position. The figure
then
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 increased dramatically to almost more than 1800
questions
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 in the Juny.
In addition
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,
although
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 starting from the first position in
January
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 at about 900
questions
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 , the
questions
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 gained by
telephone
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 grew slightly to 1000
questions
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 in April and occupied the second place at 1600 enquiries until the end of the given period
In contrast
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, even though, starting in second position at almost 790 queries, the
questions
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 gained by letter/
email
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 decreased to roughly 650
questions
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 in February. After being overtaken by in-person queries in the middle of February, the by-letter /
email
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questions
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 decreased to just under 400
questions
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 in June.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words questions, january, email, telephone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • in person
  • by letter/email
  • by telephone
  • general trend
  • six-month period
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • fluctuations
  • monthly data
  • comparison
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