The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram describes the people following of
varieties
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of sports in one area in 1997 and 2017. The number is measured by
thousands
. In general, tennis was the most popular workout that was
love
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by adults both in 1997 and 2017.
In contrast
, basketball and cricket were to be the sports with the lowest enthusiasts. Both golf and swimming stayed at the same level for 20 years, around thirty
thousands
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. It means, there were no significant differences. Football and rugby were at the same level with the most significant increase from 30
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to almost fifty
thousands
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. Followed by basketball was incline more than ten
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in the period. Cricket was the only
one
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sport that decreased in participation. it dramatically decreased by almost 80 per cent from 1997 to 2017. The given data shows, that in 2017 cricket was the lowest sport with less than ten
thousands
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participants and the other six sports were have participants more than twenty
thousands
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people.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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