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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same to periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same to periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The current research report is provided by a table and pie chart. The table chart gives information about the total number of
visitors
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 to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after it was renewed. The two pie charts illustrate the conclusion of that research in the proportion of
people
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 who visited that museum. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, the number of
visitors
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 increased significantly in two years.
Moreover
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, the refurbishment of the Ashdown Museum boosted the level of pleased
visitors
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. During the year before renovation, the rate of
visitors
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 was 74000
people
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, but over a year after repairs, it rose to 92000
people
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. The percentage of “dissatisfied”
visitors
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 plunged from 40% to 15%.
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, the figure for “very satisfied” and “satisfied”
visitors
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 soared from 15% to 35% and from 30% to 40%, respectively. The number of
people
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 who abstained from voting remained unchangeable.
Furthermore
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, the proportion of “very dissatisfied”
visitors
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 dropped by 2 times from 10% to 5%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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